Kaitlyn McLeod – from Michelle
| PEER REVIEW FEEDBACK FORM Use this template to guide your review of your partner’s essay. Answer all questions here, and feel free to add additional notes outside of the categories below. REMEMBER: Be respectful of the work your partner has put in. Treat your partner as you like to be treated. |
| TASK ORIENTATION Does the essay follow the task? How do you know this? [Look at the assignment itself and the guidelines given.] The essay follows the task in its entirety as it states the topic (debates and benefits of GMOs) and it why it is an issue of importance in society. It further addresses multiple perspectives about people’s opinions on GMOs and the research paper will serve to engage and convince the readers into why they are beneficial (by providing factual data and evidence proving the point). |
| STRUCTURE Locate the thesis–and say it in your own words to be sure you understood it. Now find the topic sentences. Does each topic sentences sum up or introduce its paragraph effectively? The thesis is mainly about how the advantages of genetically modified organisms outweigh the disadvantages they offer — describing its contribution to agriculture and diet. There are no topic sentences yet. |
| SUPPORT & ANALYSIS Is evidence being used for any and all statements made? Does the author introduce, analyze, and explain the evidence? What’s the strongest piece of evidence? As it is a rough draft, there is still no sources/pieces of evidence cited. |
| ORGANIZATION Does the paper read smoothly? Are there parts that seem out of place or confusing? (Mark these. Give suggestions if possible.) Add any transitions that would make the organization smoother. The explanation for each paragraph is concise and connects back to the thesis. I loved the idea of a counterargument! Regarding organization my only question is if you will find enough information about the benefits and/or negatives of GMOs that will fit into two body paragraphs for each. Maybe you should consider other subtopics, as for example, international views on GMOs, federal opinions and/or even a perspective from agricultural workers. |
| CLARITY Write what you consider: the clearest sentence: “though there are a multitude of negatives as well as alternative methods for consuming GMOs, the pros largely outweigh the cons making the altered organisms essential to supporting and supplying resources to an ever-growing world with ever-growing needs”. the most confusing sentence: I did not find any confusing sentences. |
| PROOFREADING Note here any suggested changes in wording, grammar, punctuation, or spelling: Not really, grammar and word choice were on point! |
| OVERALL What single change would make the most improvement in this essay? You already have a strong structure and outline, so my only suggestion is to finalize the research paper and include sources. I really enjoyed the topic and every paragraph flowed so far. |
Peer: Kaitlyn McLeod – from Anay
PEER REVIEW FEEDBACK FORM
Use this template to guide your review of your partner’s essay. Answer all questions here, and feel free to add additional notes outside of the categories below.
REMEMBER: Be respectful of the work your partner has put in. Treat your partner as you like to be treated.
TASK ORIENTATION
Does the essay follow the task? How do you know this? [Look at the assignment itself and the guidelines given.]
We were given a outline that she plans to use for her essay. Her topic is very interesting because most of our food have GMO but let us be honest, we do not really know what they are. Kaitlyn knows what she is writing, what she wants to include has a breakdown on each paragraph. Her outline does state her topic which is GMO’s the pros and cons and how it is important and how it contributes to society.
I believe Kaitlyn will answer questions about the doubts of GMOs and almost persuade the reader to make them understand that GMOs are good for us.
STRUCTURE
Locate the thesis–and say it in your own words to be sure you understood it.
Now find the topic sentences. Does each topic sentences sum up or introduce its paragraph effectively? Thesis: I am writing about GMOs, and the benefit of having them in our foods.
Well, I do not think there is a clearer sentence, she goes right into the point of the essay and how she intends on using it in her writing.
Kaitlyn gave us an outline, no topic sentence yet.
SUPPORT & ANALYSIS
Is evidence being used for any and all statements made? Does the author introduce, analyze, and explain the evidence? What’s the strongest piece of evidence?
Not yet there is no evidence and no analysis. But that’s okay it’s just a draft she just need more time finding the right sources.
ORGANIZATION
Does the paper read smoothly? Are there parts that seem out of place or confusing? (Mark these. Give suggestions if possible.) Add any transitions that would make the organization smoother.
Her outline is smooth and has a flow in the correct way. She could have added on what source she plans to use in her essay.
CLARITY
Write what you consider:
1. the clearest sentence
though there are a multitude of negatives as well as alternative methods for consuming GMOs, the pros largely outweigh the cons making the altered organisms essential to supporting and supplying resources to an ever-growing world with ever-growing needs”.
So I’m guessing Kaitlyn is going to use a source here but she does plan to use this sentence in her introduction
2. the most confusing sentence There is no confusing sentence.
PROOFREADING
Note here any suggested changes in wording, grammar, punctuation, or spelling: None, so far since it just the outline.
OVERALL
What single change would make the most improvement in this essay? It’s a great outline. Hope all goes well when you finish your paper.
